Ka pai Khadija. Another awesome poem. I like the way it rhymes. I wonder if there is another word you could swap away for at the end? I can see you've entered your poem in the slam which is great. Remember you can check out other poems on this site.
Hi Phill, Me too I like the way it rhymes. Maybe there is another word I could swap, and I'll see if I can. Yes I have put it through, and I'll look at other people's poems as well. Thank you
Great work completing this week's poetry slam activity. Have you done magnetic poetry or something similar before? Which has been your favorite of the poetry slam this summer?
You’ve crafted a wonderful and summery poem, well done! I felt like I was at the beach reading your words, the ‘sparkly water’ was an awesome line! Have you thought about a word to replace 'away' in the last line?
I hope you are enjoying summer, and get a chance to do the things in your poem!
Kia Ora Lauren, I love poetry but I had never seen the Magnetic poem. I think my favorite one was the Haiku. Yes I have thought about another word and I'm going to change that right now. Thank you
Ka pai Khadija. Another awesome poem. I like the way it rhymes. I wonder if there is another word you could swap away for at the end? I can see you've entered your poem in the slam which is great. Remember you can check out other poems on this site.
ReplyDeleteHi Phill,
DeleteMe too I like the way it rhymes.
Maybe there is another word I could swap, and I'll see if I can.
Yes I have put it through, and I'll look at other people's poems as well.
Thank you
Kia ora Khadija,
ReplyDeleteGreat work completing this week's poetry slam activity. Have you done magnetic poetry or something similar before? Which has been your favorite of the poetry slam this summer?
You’ve crafted a wonderful and summery poem, well done! I felt like I was at the beach reading your words, the ‘sparkly water’ was an awesome line! Have you thought about a word to replace 'away' in the last line?
I hope you are enjoying summer, and get a chance to do the things in your poem!
Ngā mihi,
Lauren
Kia Ora Lauren,
DeleteI love poetry but I had never seen the Magnetic poem.
I think my favorite one was the Haiku.
Yes I have thought about another word and I'm going to change that right now.
Thank you